Very Nice. Here's A Fiver From Me!
I actually got a good lesson out of this! I'm working on my first Flash at the moment, and you actually made me catch a mistake I was making with my schematics. You have a real solid anime art foundation to present here, and I hope to see more from you. Spelling, spelling, spelling. That's my biggest concern, as correct spelling dictates how serious your work will be considered as you grow and submit more. My best advise would be to write everything out in an email or Word document that you can keep for yourself and run everything through a spell check. Copy and paste each paragraph into your text areas as needed. Other than that, Fantastic Work! Keep it up!
TheRaceman